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Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Seven is up on UP!

Walkazo said:
It's interesting that Tabuu turned out to be a vigilante (with a history with Anton, no less), seeing as his last line towards La Reine in Chapter 6 was a bit ominous...
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Tabuu was just messing around there with La Reine.

And this story is in desperate need of an anti-hero. Trust me.

We haven't seen the last of Tabuu.
Walkazo said:
...however when he showed up in this chapter, rather than saying "The stranger sent out Michael.", it would have been better to say "The stranger sent out a Gallade." and then start calling it Michael after it was confirmed that it was the same "stranger" as last time.
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Ah.

I thought it was fairly understood that it was the same stranger from before, but you're right - considering the scene is from Javelin and Walkazo's point of view, they wouldn't already know what the Gallade's name was. I'll correct that.
Walkazo said:
Other than that, nothing Also, on the main page, shouldn't Anton be in the Team Plasma tab now, or...
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oh yeah. ._.
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Seven is up on UP!

Viridi said:
Walkazo said:
...however when he showed up in this chapter, rather than saying "The stranger sent out Michael.", it would have been better to say "The stranger sent out a Gallade." and then start calling it Michael after it was confirmed that it was the same "stranger" as last time.
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Ah.

I thought it was fairly understood that it was the same stranger from before, but you're right - considering the scene is from Javelin and Walkazo's point of view, they wouldn't already know what the Gallade's name was. I'll correct that.
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Yeah, exactly. I mean, you can still use the nickname even if they don't know it (omniscient third person POV), but while context does imply it's Tabuu, it'd still flow better if he's explicitly identified (either by name or by drawing attention to his distinctive Snag Machine) before skipping to naming the Pokemon. imho
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Seven is up on UP!

"I've help Pokémon..." ought to be "I've helped Pokémon..."

Other than that, it was a good chapter. Lovely punny villainous getaway, and the rivals thing seems like it would be an interesting little sub-plot to appear from time to time much like in the Pokémon anime.
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Eight! I'm still making this!

Chapter 8.

It's a little short, but this seemed like a good stopping point.
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Eight! I'm still making this!

As I always say to folks who apologize for short updates: it's just good to get an update, so no worries. And you're right, it does seem like a natural break point. Anyway, didn't notice any typos or anything, and I loved Patton's involvement in the last little bit; my part was good too, and I'm glad to see the group's already at the second gym rather than taking forever to travel or whatever: guess I'm used to the actual TV series' snail's pace, lol.
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Eight! I'm still making this!

sweet chapter B )

it'd be a shame if somebody

ONE-UPPED YOU WITH A TWO-PART SPECIAL
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Eight! I'm still making this!

Walkazo said:
...and I'm glad to see the group's already at the second gym rather than taking forever to travel or whatever: guess I'm used to the actual TV series' snail's pace, lol.
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Yeah, I would like to finish this story before the year's over. Don't know if I can do that, but I'm going to try to keep it so that each city, forest, route, etc. only takes up one or two chapters.
Tabuu said:
sweet chapter B )

it'd be a shame if somebody

ONE-UPPED YOU WITH A TWO-PART SPECIAL
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oh you
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Eight! I'm still making this!

Chapter 9.

In retrospect, I probably should have introduced Paula at the end of last chapter, so as to make this one not as long and make that one longer. But whatever. Happy belated birthday, Dippy.

And yes, we'll be seeing Paula again.

The title of the next chapter is going to be "The Main Protagonists Actually Start Catching Pokemon".

EDIT: also ha ha tabuu i am now the most recent fic update
 
Re: Pokémon Black and White: Wiki Edition: Chapter Nine. Take that, Tabuu.

i still released a two-part special and four more chapters in three days