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Re: Project Aviate
My presentation for the MWiki Awards is a prelude to Project Aviate.
Thought I should mention that.
My presentation for the MWiki Awards is a prelude to Project Aviate.
Thought I should mention that.
Scarecrow von Steuben
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Re: Project Aviate
Now, I'm basing this solely on the prologue, so my opinion may change, but I don't think I'm a huge fan of this.
As far as I can tell, it's from the perspective of Edgy McDarkCoolBadass who goes around being edgy, dark, cool, and badass, while killing lots of people along the way. Though this isn't an inherently bad premise, something about the way it's written kind of rubs me the wrong way, though since I can't really pinpoint it, my criticism here is pretty useless. Dippy or somebody like that could probably express it better.
Now, I'm basing this solely on the prologue, so my opinion may change, but I don't think I'm a huge fan of this.
As far as I can tell, it's from the perspective of Edgy McDarkCoolBadass who goes around being edgy, dark, cool, and badass, while killing lots of people along the way. Though this isn't an inherently bad premise, something about the way it's written kind of rubs me the wrong way, though since I can't really pinpoint it, my criticism here is pretty useless. Dippy or somebody like that could probably express it better.
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Re: Project Aviate
...uh, maybe you could read what actually happens next so you can give a proper criticism?
I mean, come on, it's right there on the page...
...uh, maybe you could read what actually happens next so you can give a proper criticism?
I mean, come on, it's right there on the page...
Scarecrow von Steuben
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Re: Project Aviate
I didn't even see there were two other chapters until like a minute ago.
I read 'em and I like 'em both a lot better than the prologue. Keep it up.
I didn't even see there were two other chapters until like a minute ago.
I read 'em and I like 'em both a lot better than the prologue. Keep it up.
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Re: Project Aviate
Thanks.
Are there any particular things you want to praise/criticize?
Thanks.
Are there any particular things you want to praise/criticize?
Scarecrow von Steuben
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Re: Project Aviate
Positives: Portraying Faustino as being flawed and not always on the top of things (by which I mean giving him genuine flaws and weaknesses that make him look bad, and thus more realistic).
Negatives: You kind of overdid the whole Ninja McBadassAssassin thing in the prologue, but I already brought that up.
Positives: Portraying Faustino as being flawed and not always on the top of things (by which I mean giving him genuine flaws and weaknesses that make him look bad, and thus more realistic).
Negatives: You kind of overdid the whole Ninja McBadassAssassin thing in the prologue, but I already brought that up.
Dr. Javelin
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Re: Project Aviate
pst
keep writing this
it's still good
pst
keep writing this
it's still good
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Re: Project Aviate
Yes and no. I wrote my presentation just a bit after I wrote 1-2, and since then I've hit a hitch.
Don't get the wrong idea: I know what I'm going to do, it's just procrastination and laziness, mostly.
Yes and no. I wrote my presentation just a bit after I wrote 1-2, and since then I've hit a hitch.
Don't get the wrong idea: I know what I'm going to do, it's just procrastination and laziness, mostly.
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