MSTing:Horrible Smash Bros Crossover.

[Guiliant]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Well it got a smile out of me

 

[Glowsquid]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Sorry, but that wasn't nearly as funny as the first one, Blitz.

As I said, that chapter is the less stupid of the whole story, it's only in the next that the whole "Yoshi with guns kill random aliens" ordeal begin, and around Chapter 7 that epic mind screw like:

Silence, nothing but silence, the explosion rocked the building launching Dry Bones into the air and landing headfirst in the ground. His body ached, his arms has in extreme pain. He…he was dead…

Dry Bones lifted himself off the ground, he was nothing but bone now, he was angry.

this, appears.

 

[Stooben]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Sorry, but that wasn't nearly as funny as the first one, Blitz.

As I said, that chapter is the less stupid of the whole story, it's only in the next that the whole "Yoshi with guns kill random aliens" ordeal begin, and around Chapter 7 that epic mind screw like:

Silence, nothing but silence, the explosion rocked the building launching Dry Bones into the air and landing headfirst in the ground. His body ached, his arms has in extreme pain. He…he was dead…

Dry Bones lifted himself off the ground, he was nothing but bone now, he was angry.

this, appears.

That's kind of scary.

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Har har.

 

[SmartGuy]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

I did my own MST of Chapter 3 of Legend of the Infinite Empire yesterday, I PM'd it to St00by and I forgot to save a draft of it before I sent it, and I have not recieved it back since, and I'm not prepared to do it again so here I'm going to do chapter 4:

The plane shook violently; apparently the aliens had ships of their own . Their blasters were tearing the ship apart.

Very foolish aliens, why are they tearing their own ship apart?

3d and Beanbean or other whys know as BB were shocked,

So who knew that Bean was shocked? Bean and 3D, or the other Whys?

After the landed outside, the found his hat, all that seemed left of the heroic plumber.

Too bad there was little left of their memories, since they can not remember even basic words needed to make a sentence make sense.

The rain trickled down; each drop that fell, Plumber felt a hammer smashing a nail into his chest.

I did not realise that Plumber had such fragile and sensitive skin.

Mario97 was lost forever.

Don't worry, he still exists, as a corpse rotting into submission somewhere.

YY was armed with his signature shotgun slung around his back, and his machinegun in his arms.

Having a machine gun in your arm is not very conveniant, unless of course you don't care not being able to lift your arms.

While Parayoshi was armed with sniper rifle around his back and the machinegun in his arms,

What? another one? why is everybody putting machine guns in their arms?

The two Koopas were gunned done immediately.

Yes, the author could have used the right choice of words, but rhyming is apparently so much better.

The alien spoke, with a tone of authority. His words were, “Lay down your weapons or die”

So.. the alien would be willing to attack them when they are armed and ready, but not when they are defenseless? OK.

The room’s light came to life,

Since the light of that room came to life, can the light of the whole world be far behind? hopefully so, because when and if it is, it will hopefully help destroy the Lord of Darkness.

the ground lay weapons powerful enough to…well do a lot of things.

You mean like do your dishes? tidy up your living room? brush your teeth?

YoshiFan scanned the room, in the right corner of the room there were Shady Koopas hauling Grenade Boxes into the room.

Yes, because that is something that is only noticable when using a scanner.

The alien that hovered in the center disappeared but reappeared in front of YoshiFan, apparently the aliens could teleport

Well you don't say. :/

YoshiFan wondered what else powers they had.

Hopefully, the power to form grammatically correct sentences.

YoshiFan would rather die than surrender the name and location of his leader. He smiled and answered back, “Your mama”

Even the people of this story resort to immature comebacks, shocking indeed.

he opened fire on one of the grenade boxes the Koopa had been carrying. The room lit up, YoshiFan’s vision was blurred but not badly.

Yes, his vision was not hindered, therefore he can now see the fact that he is on fire.

OY too had not been fazed

Who?

Their leader was big and buff, his smiled, his teeth were as shiny as pearls. “What is it General Wayoshi?” Porplemontage asked.

Too bad he traded his ability to speak correctly for a smiled.

The Forces of Light watched as out of the shuttle appeared two people and one unknown life form.

Does anybody remember this quote?

The “Forces of Light” we tossed out of the fortress after being defeated by their shadow forms.

So they watched even though they were defeated by their shadow forms previously?

Plumber frowned, “Beanbean” he didn’t sound too happy.

Yes, after all, who enjoys the sound of their own sibbling's names?

Gofer came to Plumber, “Where is the 97 of Mario?”

.......What?

The warrior spoke, “So you have awaken, I am Sir Grodus, Sysop of Strength and Reviving. You my friend died…by with your two gloves, and a quite smelly shoe. I revived you.”

What does his smelly shoe and gloves have to do with his godmodding?

“I must defeat Fire Fang, and he is a threat.”

A threat to making this story worth reading? ok then...

Mario97 scaled the tower, trying to avoid unnecessary confrontations. He finally reached the top.

So first he looked to make sure the tower was safe, then reached the top by doing nothing? quite spectacular.

The rain was pouring down, light flashed, and the loud sound of thunder. Mario97 could hear it all,

SM97 is a cool guy, he can hear things that aren't tehcnically possible to hear and doesn't afraid of anything.

Will our heroes defeat the shadowy creature?

Will Mario97 defeat Fire Fang?

Will Omega Squad survive?

1. Yes by using the magical power of clichedness.

2. See no. 1

3. Hopefully not because then they will have to continue being in this story.

 

[Glowsquid]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

I had the idea to continue this, and SG post was the perfect occasion fo' this.

Chapter Three

Three down, 9 more to go.

Notice I made a typo and said YoshiFan's name was Yoshifan...

A missparced name should be the less of yours grammar worries, buddy.

“What?!?” Plumber said the shock in the tone of voice

The shock in the tone of voice said "What?!? Plumber".

SPL sneered, “What do you have in mind?”
Isyou smiled, “So now we’re on talking terms.”

There's no better dealin' than with guys you tried to kill one chapter ago.

Mario97 shook his head, “I don’t trust him.”

That would be the logical choice in an actually good story.

He’s telling the truth, I can feel his heart pulse through the ground

Don't trust your feeling.

GBB nodded, “No one would lie to me.”

This story is good.

Isyou nodded

I wonder where I saw that...

Isyou nodded

Yoshi626 nodded

GBB nodded

Gotcha'!

Plumber took a deep breath and hesitantly replied

"Oh damn, if I accept, this is going to continue!”

“Master, the pieces are moving into place.”

It's a playskool puzzle.

SPL had set up a tent he laid in his sleeping bag. He could here quite a commotion outside.

I agree, this story is quite a "commotion".

Drybones stood his arms folded, “Ah SPL you’ve finally come out” Commented Drybones.

[...]

I’m Ultimatetoad” Ultimatetoad introduced.

They had a bet to see who could be the more redundant.

The asteroid was crisp from its descent from space

Space has become a better barbecue.

And the alien appeared the metal squid like creature appeared.

This dangerous new foe is known as "the alien appeared the metal squid like creature".

Beanbean was tired, he was sick, he was angry.

wrong gender dude.

3d nodded “you heard me, kfkhsfihkltjklyt”

If only the author told us how to pronounciate that.

Beanbean pulled out his hammer and gave 3d a good whack.

Okay... So they're like Ren and Stimpy?

The two joined in laughter together.

department of redundancy department.

the sun went down and came back up.

He forgot his aspirine (He had to read this story, see)

The Fahr Outpost was still recovering it was normally cold…but it had never been this cold before.

No shit.

He opened the door to the hanger bay

an hanger is a hangar but angry.

The trio of Yoshis was the toughest and most capable team of commandos

=

The trio of Yoshis jumped into a conversation.

Bullies.

Wayoshi was Commander of the ‘Shroom Army behind only the founder himself, Porplemontage.

When dawn comes, Wayoshi transform into his alter-ego "Commander of the ‘Shroom Army " and beats up merchants of dried grapes.

Our intelligence

Your lack of, you mean.

Wayoshi nodded and held his hand up hid fingers

He's ashamed of those fingers.

The Team labeled, “Forces of Light”,

They attack with clichés and they have the power of the deux ex machina.

Isyou scratched his faced.

Conjugation bugs him.

The ‘’Forces of Light’’ found itself surrounded by Koopa Troopas. A Shady Koopa smiled, “Isyou, you traitor, you shall die!”

"Forces" is singular now.

The scene exploded into action.

An explosion of action! It's a Legend of the Infinite Empire!

f Light’’ formed a circle and began fighting of the Koopa force. Plumber pulled out his baseball bat and smacked A Koopa

We'll forever remember you, A Koopa.

The creature cried out, “Foolish Mortal, how dare you challenge ‘’Fire Fang’’ guardian of the Shadow Prince!”

Fire Fang is so dumb he needs to put his own name in "quotation marks".

The Day turned to Dawn,

Unfortunately, even her was hit by this horrible assault against language.

The Dragon was huge, then dragon cried out, its cry piercing.

The name of The Dragon is... "dragon".

The aliens, finished with their chanting turned, they spotted Omega Squad.

The chanting TURNED.

3d and Beanbean strolled back toward their apartment; they were shocked to see a metal, squid-like alien waiting for them. The alien’s voice hallow, “Hello, 3d, Beanbean…I am Gofer. The fate of the world is in our hands”…

Your mission: Destroy this waste of a story.

To be continued….

No!

 

[Yoshario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Mod Note:Please, don't quote the whole post.
You have made Legend of the Infinite Empire a whole lot better.

 

[Stooben]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

SG: Yours wasn't too bad. Some of them were pretty good, considering it was your first MST.

Blitz: Rolling on the floor laughing as always. :p

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

So much... lulz...

 

[Yoshario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

My first MST, so its probably bad.

"Remeber that adventure we had 100 years ago?" SM97 asked,

I remeber that.

"The one where I died in.

Of course your dead. Thats why your talking to me right now.

"Ya." said Plumber. No one knew just how he came back.

*shot* Hey, I'm alive. No one knew just how I came back.

Also, it seemed like Plumber had died too but only gotten stuck inside dimensions.

WTF

He met Max2 who was sent there after Kirby Wiki was destroyed.

Where?

Ther they plotted out an area which became known as userpedia. But, it was not settled untill 10 years ago by Great Gonzo.

Because I love to make a wiki and not edit it for ten years.

But that's off topic.

No, really?

"Well it seems that only people who on that trip cn see it." Said sm97,

I cn't see it.

"Plus you can be sent to any wiki, interesting huh." "Let's use it!"

Erm..use what?

Then, pulled Plumber down the pipe. It led him to userpedia.

How convenient. I suppose instead of taking a plane I will just pull down a pipe to my next vacation.

But they noticed something different about it. A thunderstorm was ravaging it. Then, from behind them, a blast came.

OH SHIT!

The blaster had an all to farmiliar "face". "I'm back." said Toa Waluigi.

We've been looking all over for you, where have you been?

"I was never dead, just...returned." he said.

Oh no he's returned

"Well ths time won't be returned." said Plumber, "But I do wish to know why you seem to be weaker and more cautious lately."

CUZ I SAW A CAUTION SINE AND GOT SCAR3D.

"Well isn't the answer obvious!" Toa waluigi screamed out,"There is a thunerstorm going on here right now!"

AHHH RUN FROM THE BIG EFFIN THUNERSTORM!

He then threw a King Bob-Omb sized explosion straight towards Super Mario97.

That's a big explosion.

Super Mario97 was hit by it, but it didn't seemlike it did much damage.

OUCH I'M HIT BY A KING BOBOMB SIZED BOMB. Wait...there isn't much damage.

Then, a srike of lightning came down and struck toa Waluigi!

Oh noez. Deus ex machina.

He then brought up a wall of energy.

Where do I purchase these Energy Walls?

Then, another bolt hit Plumber. More spisciffically, the bag he was carrying.

Ouch, I bolt of lightning hit me! No wait, thats just the bag I was carrying.

When the everyone woke up, seven people there instead of three.

When did seven people get there?

three of them were Paper Luigi DS, Great Gonzo, and 3dejong!

YAY!

the most shocking was there were two toa Waluigi's.

Does that mean that theres gonna be twice the fanfics?

One was normal.

Right...

The oter seemed to have an essence of darkness.

AHH EVIL OTTER ON THE LOOSE.

It seems the truth has been revealed." said the darker one. "I am Toa Waluigi. Toa of Spam. I fused myself to the original when my master told me, right after he left to find Wikia.

No. Your Toa Waluigi? Really?

And we met and I gave you the Star article. So he wasn't the one who thought up the idea so, who? thougt (well everyone was thinking that).

This is a great fanfic thought (well everyone was thinking that)

For the first time in 100 years, Toa Waluigi woke up. "Everyone get away now." He said. And they returned to the Super Mario Wiki.

Sleeping for 100 years is a bad habit.

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Not bad.

Also I'm sometimes going to talk in third person from now on... Says Lario!

 

[Yoshario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Not bad.

Also I'm sometimes going to talk in third person from now on... Says Lario!

Yoshario says that talking in the third person causes confusion.

 

[BEEEEEAAARRRS]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

God I remember trying to read those stories, but gave up.

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

So I bothered bumping this.

 

[Glowsquid]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

I did some MSTing of a story on Userpedia, but well, they suck.

Here's the link for anyone curious(read:insain): http://solcon.wikkii.com/xephyr/index.php?topic=1067.0

 

[ScarecrowPerson]

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XD

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

I did some MSTing of a story on Userpedia, but well, they suck.

Here's the link for anyone curious(read:insain): http://solcon.wikkii.com/xephyr/index.php?topic=1067.0

That wasn't bad...

This thread is the reason why I don't do fanfictions. :P

 

[SmartGuy]

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I did some MSTing of a story on Userpedia, but well, they suck.

Here's the link for anyone curious(read:insain): http://solcon.wikkii.com/xephyr/index.php?topic=1067.0

That wasn't bad...

This thread is the reason why I don't do fanfictions. :P

What about before this thread was made?

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

I did some MSTing of a story on Userpedia, but well, they suck.

Here's the link for anyone curious(read:insain): http://solcon.wikkii.com/xephyr/index.php?topic=1067.0

That wasn't bad...

This thread is the reason why I don't do fanfictions. :P

What about before this thread was made?

I'm not the best at fanfictions.

I haven't tried, but I know I would suck anyway...

 

[Glowsquid]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Fo' the first time, I'm going to try to MST something that isn't from here.

[A/N: This will be based on The Powerpuff Girls episode which has the same title]

so, it's a rip-off.

Today in Diamond City, there was an invasion planned by a small group of teenage thugs at Diamond City Elementary.

Obviously, 300+ or so students and teacher are NO MATCH for a small group of teenage thug.

Kat and Ana refused to let them near their friends 9-Volt and 18-Volt, but unfortunately, they were in for a bad surprise [...] there were big bolded letters saying: "CRIME IS NOW LEGAL." It was signed by the mayor of Diamond City!

According to the author, hanging out near 9-Volt and 18-Volt is a crime... Well, they are walking fashion disasters.

One of the thugs gave Kat and Ana a degree, which showed a tiny print of what a mayor would usually write.

Because obviously, all mayors write the same way.

9-Volt: "What?! Crime legal?"

What?! Me stupid?

18-Volt: "Oh no!"

WHERE DID THE HEADCRAB COME FROM

Kat: "What's gotten into the mayor of Diamond City?"

bad writing.

Ana: "This is not good!"

This is bad, real bad.

Meanwhile, Cyber-Crash, ApacheMan2K, Ami, Yumi, and I were attempting to stop a bank robbery at the Diamond City Bank.

Man! That WarioMan3K guy and his ridiculously named friends are SUUUUCHHHH nice and helpful persons! They stop conveniently located bank robbery and they don't.... Bah, fuck this.

We, too, got the same message from the bank robbers about crime being legal. After that, we were forced to let them escape lest we get arrested...according to them.

"You just murdered someone!"
"Yeah, but it's legal now and I'll prove it with this piece of paper that couldn't possibly be an imitation"
"Ah, okay, cool".

Cyber-Crash: "This is madness!"

I would do a Sparta joke but this is way too easy.

Me: "And I thought it was bad that the whole state of California legalized cyberbullying in a court case..."

NOT RELATED TO THE FACT THAT THE AUTHOR IS PART OF AN ANTI YOUTUBE TROLL GROUP *wink wink*

Ami: "We need to straighten things up!"

It'd take more than a wish to straighten this story up.

Yumi: "Like Cy said, this IS madness..."

Ohohooh, you're tempting me.

And so, we rushed to the mayor's office, and demanded that we speak with him regarding crime being legalized.

Apparently, they're the only one to care since they get there directly.... Why would they be allowed there anyway?

(The mayor turned out to be Wendy "Kootie Pie" Koopa in disguise, as she turned the office chair around)

SHOCKING TWIST

"To put you hot-headed has-beens out of business!

WarioMan3k's so cool, he was the one to kick Kootie Pie ass every time in the Mario cartoon (You just didn't see him).

And the same goes for the Mario Bros.!

I didn't know that the Mario Bros. lived in Diamond City, but I agree this will totally affect what happen in the Mushroom Kingdom.

"That's what you think! I secretly put in a part of this law that stopping crime is illegal

Apparently, all the other officials of the city were too dumb to notice.

Due to Wendy Koopa's lew, we can't stop evil that's going around in Diamond City,

My google-fu tell me this is the definition of "lew":

Lukewarm; tepid.

So, due to Due to Wendy Koopa's lukewarm, tepid, WARIOMAN3KS!!!!! can't stop evil that's going around in Diamond City, OH NO.

 

[SmartGuy]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Legend of the Infinite Empire part 5.

Wayoshi hurried to the comm center. The door to the comm center opened, The Security Guard saluted,

Heil Wayoshi.

Wayoshi commanded Wayoshi looked at the comm officer Stumpers

Wayoshi commanded himself to look at some guy called the comm officer Stumpers.

The screen came to life

The screen was exempt from the laws of physics.

“Play that back” ordered Wayoshi Stumpers nodded.

"Play it back so that we can check for inevitable punctuation errors.

the video played back over and over, on through the night.

And they got bored and went to a coffee break.

The hooded figure watched, he waited for the perfect time, the ‘Master General’ the greatest rank a solider could grasp.

"SmartyGuy watched, he waited for the perfect time, the "making sense" the greatest form of fanfiction a writer could grasp."

he sat up to his feet and walked out the door.

The hooded figure managed to hack reality to allow himself to sit and stand up simultainiously.

The war that would engulf the world was calling him…it was a call Xzelion couldn’t stop.

He forgot how to cut the telephone wires.

She was quite surprised when the five gunmen captured her and her buddies.

She was suprised, but her buddies apparently weren't, because they used to get it all the time back before this trainwreck of a story began.

Fg figured the gunmen to hold them hostage,

He asked the gunmen nicely if he could hold them hostage, they were reluctant.

Arend sat next to Fg looked Fg in the eye and whispered. “I’m sorry I got you into this…” Arend said

Arend uttered "Arend sat next to Fg looked Fg in the eye and whispered. “I’m sorry I got you into this…”" to himself.

A grenade fell to the ground…it was a flash grenade,

Why not just say it was a flash grenade in the first place?

he notice a well built soldier standing in the center of the campsite. The soldier was in his early thirties or so. The soldier was armed with a machine slung around his back, and a pistol in his left hand. He smiled, “Hello my name is Xzelion, are you okay?”

HOLY SHIT! XZELION IS A ROBOT?

“Wait!” Plumber heard a voice cry,

It wasn't a person who called out, but the voice itself. (I couldn't think of anything else before people start saying I stole it from Blitz).

Sir Grodus the Sysop stretched out his hand and pulled Plumber to his feet.

He left his feet on top of the canyon.

Plumber say behind the huge Sysop was Super mario97,

SmartyGuy say the lack of coherency make him upset.

Wayoshi watched as a small jeep drove toward the base,

Most likely one of Wayo's toys.

It was a friendly face. Wayoshi smiled, “Xzelion, it is good to see you, what brings you here?

He came to show you he has turned into your Jeep toy thing.

To Be Continued…

GOD NO!

 

[Glowsquid]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

That was... really good, actually.

 

[Lario]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

Both of those are EPIC.

 

[SmartGuy]

Re: MSTing:Toa Waluigi's Fanfiction

That was... really good, actually.

Heh, thanks.

 

[Lario]

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Both of those stories are products of things that try too much to be epic...

Or atleast good...