New Sherlock Mario Book 3: The Worldwide Catastrophe

What should the new book 3 be?

  • The Concert Mystery

    Votes: 3 50.0%
  • The Donut Shop Dilema

    Votes: 2 33.3%
  • The Murder on 16th Street

    Votes: 1 16.7%

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I have to applaud to you NSM for being able to juggle so many fics at once
 
David T. Darlton said:
I have to applaud to you NSM for being able to juggle so many fics at once
I'm just that skilled.

Anyway it will be released tomorrow

EDIT: Actually, it will come in the next couple days. I forgot my family might be dragging me into something for the superbowl
 
Chapter 11:

http://userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/New_Sherlock_Mario_Book_3:_The_Worldwide_Catastrophe/Chapter_11

Another one will come either tomorrow, or through the week
 
If the hovercraft can travel to Cairo in 30 minutes - assuming one could actually build a hovercraft - then they would have to be traveling at 4,000 miles per hour. Somehow, I doubt a person can travel at that speed.
You randomly switch tense in the middle of the chapter, and how in the world could they track the theif? It doesn't make much sense.
Also, you used the word "had" three times in the first few sentences. I would suggest trying some different vocabulary.
 
Discord said:
If the hovercraft can travel to Cairo in 30 minutes - assuming one could actually build a hovercraft - then they would have to be traveling at 4,000 miles per hour. Somehow, I doubt a person can travel at that speed.
You randomly switch tense in the middle of the chapter, and how in the world could they track the theif? It doesn't make much sense.
Also, you used the word "had" three times in the first few sentences. I would suggest trying some different vocabulary.
Well it is fiction, it doesn't have to all be scientific and true.

They track the thief using satellites as said in the first chapter.

Again, it's fiction it doesn't all have to make sense.


I'll check my vocab too
 
No, I won't take that excuse. Fiction doesn't have to be logical, but it has to make sense. And somehow I doubt that these characters are going to just happen to find a hovercraft that can travel 4,000 miles per hour on the streets of Paris.
 
Discord said:
No, I won't take that excuse. Fiction doesn't have to be logical, but it has to make sense. And somehow I doubt that these characters are going to just happen to find a hovercraft that can travel 4,000 miles per hour on the streets of Paris.
If you read, Gallade made it, they didn't just find it. I understand that it has to make sense, but it's not that big of a deal. If everything was true, the story would be boring and not have enough action in it.
 
Oh yes, I suppose I should mention that they were travelling at about 4 times the speed of the Earth's rotation.
But you're right, the story doesn't actually have to make sense, because that would be stupid.