The Super Mario Chronicles

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It’s a me, Mario!
Peach woke up in a dark corridor.

She didn’t remember what happened or why she was there. She just heard some diabolical screaming that was haunting her. Motionless, she crumbled on the floor and went back asleep. A voice was heard:
—She woke up. She couldn’t stay awake with the screaming. Take her were we said.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Peach was thrown into a dark room.
She was awfully hurt. She couldn’t even lift her arm and could barely talk.
—Wh... wha... what i... is thi... this p... pla.. place...?
—Oh, fair Princess Peach. This is just one of the many rooms in this Altar. You do not want to know what will happen to you.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—You will be the vessel for the revival of our ultimate ruler.
—Wha-!?
Peach woke up again, only to find herself in the middle of a Black Circle, surrounded by mysterious caped figures.
—We will start the ritual soon. Prepare yourself, Princess!
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
A mysterious figure broke the stained glass and broke in.
It then hit all the caped figures in the Ritual, grabbed Peach, and finally went out again with the Princess.
—Who... Who are you? And why is this all happening?
—You might not know me, but you know my two sons.
—Wha-?! You’re Mario and Luigi’s father?!
—That’s right. My name is Lurio...
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Peach and Lurio searched for shelter.
—How are my boys, Princess?
—They’re fine, they actually form part of the Royal Guard.
—Really? How much training did they do?
—They… actually didn’t do any training. When Bowser captured me and the Guard was gone, they saved me.
—Really?! I’m so proud of them!
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Lurio and Peach were looking for a way to Toad Town.
After walking for hours, they finally reach a familiar place for Peach: The hill were she had talked to Mario for the first time.
—We’re here!—she screamed out loud—Finally!
—Do… Do you know this place?
—Yes, I do. This is were I first talked to Mario. When I knew him better, I… I…
—You what?
—I… started to like him. But I never had the courage to tell him that…
—What is it?
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—What’s the matter, Peach?
—It’s that… I… I… I love Mario…
—Really?
—Y-Yes…—she said—. Why did you make him so perfect?
Both Peach and Lurio had a good laugh.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Mario was searching for Peach in the hill.
—Peaaaaaach! Where are you?
—Mario!
—Peach! We’ve been searching for you!
—Look who I found!
—Who is that?
—He’s Lurio, your father!
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—Dad!
—You two look very much alike.
The three had a good laugh.
—Mario, where’s Luigi? I thought he was with you.
—We split so we could find you faster—he said—. Wait until he sees this!
—I’m glad that your father saved me.
—Speaking of—continued Mario—where’s Mom?
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—I don’t know—he said.
—What?
—I am actually searching for her. I’ve been searching for a lot of time. That’s why I left home.
—What happened to her?!
—I don’t know. One day she disappeared when I woke up.
—Oh no…
—Well, let’s go to the castle.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Mario, Peach and Lurio headed to the Castle.
In there, Toadsworth, Luigi and the Guard were waiting anxiously for Mario.
Mario quickly entered, immediately followed by the words:
—LUIGI! I FOUND PEACH AND DAD!
—He must’ve lost his marbles again—he quietly told to Toadsworth—but at least Peach is rescued.
—Luigi!—said Lurio—Finally!
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—Dad?! Is that really you?!?!
—Yes, Luigi—Lurio replied.
—Dad!
—Dad, maybe you should stay at our house—said Mario.
—Sure, why not?
 

The Happy Mask Salesman

The Sage Of Party
—Dad?! Is that really you?!?!
—Yes, Luigi—Lurio replied.
—Dad!
—Dad, maybe you should stay at our house—said Mario.
—Sure, why not?
Some constructive advice. It is a little hard to follow along so each line put a Mario said or just have it like this:
-Hey Dad! I can’t believe your back! -Mario exclaimed.
-Yes son. -Lurio said

Just have it like that every line someone says something. It will take a bit more time but it will be better for your viewers in the long run. :)
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—C’mon Dad, let’s go home.
After Luigi and Lurio left, Peach called Mario. She wanted to talk about what happened in the morning.
—Mario—she said—please come. I want to talk about something.
—Yes—Mario replied.
—Your father found me when I was about to be transformed into someone.
—Who?
—I don’t know… I was trapped inside some kind of altar or something… Apparently I talked with their leader…
—Their leader?
—Yes… But it’s very peculiar. His voice sounded familiar… It reminds me of Tippi...
 

The Happy Mask Salesman

The Sage Of Party
—C’mon Dad, let’s go home.
After Luigi and Lurio left, Peach called Mario. She wanted to talk about what happened in the morning.
—Mario—she said—please come. I want to talk about something.
—Yes—Mario replied.
—Your father found me when I was about to be transformed into someone.
—Who?
—I don’t know… I was trapped inside some kind of altar or something… Apparently I talked with their leader…
—Their leader?
—Yes… But it’s very peculiar. His voice sounded familiar… It reminds me of Tippi...
Alright, much better. You wrote it in a way that is clear who is talking.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—Tippi?—Mario asked.
—Yes, Tippi—Peach replied—It just sounds so…
—Princess!—Toadsworth interrupted—The Mushroom Kingdom is under attack!!
—By who?!—exclaimed Mario.
—It’s not Bowser, Mario—Toadsworth replied—But it’s a gigantic monster! Mario! You need to stop it!!
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Mario and Peach quickly ran to the Castle’s entrance where they found Luigi with Lurio on the floor.
—Bro! We need to help Dad!—Luigi exclaimed—He’s really hurt!
—Okay! I’ve had enough! Let’s put a stop to this!—Mario said bravely.
Toads, Yoshis, Koopas, Goombas and all sorts of creatures fled for their lives. Bowser’s Castle was under attack too, so it couldn’t be behind the attack. A crack appeared on the sky, and then a giant hand emerged, breaking it and opening a portal.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
—Mario! We’ll take care of Lurio! Go stop that thing!
—Yes, Princess!—he replied.
—Good luck—said Toadsworth.
—Thanks—Mario said—I’m going to need a lot.
Panic also reigned in Bowser’s Castle.
—Grey alert! Grey alert! Everyone to their hideouts! Army, prepare yourself!—shouted Chief Bro.
—What’s happening, Lord Bowser?—the Koopas wanted to know.
—My fellow minions—he started—My loyal fellow minions, I really don’t know what’s happening. Hide wherever you can! We cannot lose anybody know! If you see Chief Bro, tell him I need to get the army ready and tell Junior to get the Airships ready.
 

GamerM10

It’s a me, Mario!
Mario curiously went into Bowser’s Castle.
He entered the front door, only to be greeted by the words:
—Red alert! Red alert! Mario is here!
—Mario?!?!—exclaimed Bowser—This is the worst moment to have you here! Scram!
—I don’t want to attack you—replied Mario—I want to help.
—What?!
—I’m the Hero of the Mushroom Kingdom! I can’t just sit here watching people die—he told Bowser—If we unite, we can defeat the giant thing! We’ve done this before.
—Okay. Let’s team up! But we have our strategy ready, where are you supposed to be?
—Well, maybe the two of us could go into the battle. I think you should help Junior in the air, while I’m on the ground—Mario suggested.
—Well? What are we waiting for? Let’s do this!—Bowser accepted.
—Also, expect me to jump to airships and back down sometimes—Mario warned— Gravity will do the rest.
—Well, let’s get ready!
 
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