Post-Apocalypse: The Adventure

Re: Post-Apocalypse Adventures

Jaden- A Pokemon Trainer with Scizor, Smoochum, Roserade, Boldore, Glaceon, and Samurott. (Typlosion, Crobat, and Pidgeot at different timings)
 
Re: Post-Apocalypse Adventures

SK - "Typically doesn't try to fix the world, rather stops anyone when he doesn't like their idea of how they can fix the world. Usually rushes to conclusions and sometimes makes wrong decisions from doing so. He mainly likes to do everything himself and doesn't usually trust anyone, including his closest friends."
 
Re: Post-Apocalypse Adventures

i wrote the prologue on google docs, and now I'm writing the first chapter.
 
Re: The Wiki's Post-Apocalypse Adventures

It's painful to read a block of text; you might want to push the "Enter" button and group sections together.

Your writing style also is begging for a label of Needs Improvement. At best.
 
Re: The Wiki's Post-Apocalypse Adventures

Thanks for the enter advice. I started the first chapter.
 
Mostly agree with Javelin. There wasn't really any description, you kinda just quickly introduced some random characters and a bit of a the plot. IMO, kind of a useless prologue, didn't really say or explain much, just kinda threw a few characters at us.
 
Blastoise said:
It's painful to read a block of text; you might want to push the "Enter" button and group sections together.

Your writing style also is begging for a label of Needs Improvement. At best.
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I'd write a full review but I'm a bit tired now. But yeah, it was bad.