Suicide League (Superhero fan story) Cancelled

Do you think i should start writing this again

  • Yes

    Votes: 5 62.5%

  • No

    Votes: 1 12.5%

  • I don't care

    Votes: 2 25.0%
  • Total voters
    8
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Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

YoshiMonsta said:
[size=8pt]I am going to be in the second 1 right, I hope so.[/size]
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Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

Alright, time for my chapter review: (DISCLAIMER: Reviews are here to help you to improve on your story by criticism and are not to insult you directly in any way possible. Also, this review represent my POV and no one else's, which basically mean you don't have to listen to the advice that may be given. I will also be very picky and full of butthurt in order for you to improve on your story-writing abilities.)

The chapter overall was okay/not bad.

There's a few grammatical errors and a few words that you typo'd in a way that they spell a different word which can be confusing at first, but luckily I managed to understand what you were trying to convey, but I suggest to go back and correct those (and place the categories on that page also).

You may want to correct this as it is confusing:
he screamed as a great surge of light as the thing began to combine its own
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The repeating word here is very unnecessary:
the skeptical blue skinned one says skeptically.
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And finally, I didn't really understand what just happen when you say "Swiper no swiping!", but then I reread it and read the main article and understand what happened, but then I didn't really buy it on you saying that to use your ability, but then this is a comedy so I can let that slide (I usually review action, adventure, violent, dark fictions). I did begin to buy it when you said it a second or third time to subdue the thief which looks epic and badass.

Which I'll then leave it with this rating:

8/10

Like I said, Okay, not bad.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

The Swiper no Swiping part comes from a joke from the Ambush Bug series where Ambush Bug used to have to say Simon Says in order to teleport :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

The skeptically part was my fault. >_> I don't really know what I was thinking there but I'll try to do better with my next chapters.
By the way, if I haven't already mentioned it, I'm the editor.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

GLaDOS said:
The skeptically part was my fault. >_> I don't really know what I was thinking there but I'll try to do better with my next chapters.
By the way, if I haven't already mentioned it, I'm the editor.
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One of the editors :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

Wait, what?
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

I has two editors :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

Toad85 said:
Lips said:
I has two editors :posh:
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Wait, what?
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I like options so i have two editors and i use the version that i like better :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

Oh, I almost forgot, don't forget to hit the enter key after someone is finished talking.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

Bump :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) First Chapter has been released

That was unnecessary.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) on Hiatus until i get a new editor

This story is on hiatus until i get a new editor as both of my editors stepped down :'( :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) on Hiatus until i get a new editor

Jesus people go on hiatus so early these days.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) on Hiatus until i get a new editor

I'll be an editor if you need one.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) on Hiatus until i get a new editor

Magus said:
I'll be an editor if you need one.
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Alright Bop i'll send you the chapter
And Jack i didn't have an editor :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) I have found a new Editor

I'll also edit if you want a back up editor.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) I have found a new Editor

I love having two editors your hired :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) I have found a new Editor

Wait, what happened to Scarecrow?
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) I have found a new Editor

He stepped down :'( :posh:
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) Second chapter has been released

Toad2012 said:
This chapter is good.
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What did you like about it
 
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