Typical Tragedy

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Don't Fear said:
Well, there aren't any tensions- that's just Tabuu's envy and spite coming to the surface. Basically, he started hating them for things they didn't even do.
Ahhhh that makes more sense.

Bec Noir said:
OH GOD NO ANOTNO Y U BE TRAITIN'???? :'(
WESA ALL GONNA DIE!!!!! 1!! @_@
 
Oh, one thing.

Would it be alright if I fixed minor grammar errors or typos? Like a part-time post-release editor or something?

I mean, I'm pretty good at finding them.
[quote author=Chapter 26]How does he even hold a like that one-handed?[/quote]
I'm guessing that there's supposed to be the word "sword" or "weapon" or something similar in that space.
 
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these cliffhangers are torture

It's nice to see that the group is fighting well now, and that fortunately, in this story anyways, symbolism isn't just symbolism. It's actually important and relevant to the story.

Another good plus: we aren't seeing too much of the action from one or two users' perspectives. Up until now it was more or less exhibiting an effect I also noted in the movie Kung Fu Panda (weird reference, but bear with me) - with too many main characters, their personalities are more likely to get shunted to the side. In Kung Fu Panda, has anyone noticed how Viper, Crane, and Monkey have about five, six lines per movie? That's what had happened earlier in this story with Smiley, Walkazo, and Alex, and I'm happy to say that it's been corrected in this chapter.

The added backstory behind Walkazo is also great.

Problems? Son of Suns is starting to feel just a bit overpowered. Not nearly as bad as Rudnicki, though. (excuse me for a sec, but seriously - how does a Nega take out a fourth of the biggest Wiki on earth's army? I mean, doesn't Wikipedia have protocol for this kind of thing? If Negas are so stupidly powerful, they could take out entire independent wikis by themselves.) The power creep is showing a bit here, since he's been bashed an insane amount by an Admin's strongest power and is still kicking at 100% or at least near 100%.

The real issue here is not how powerful he is compared to the group, however; it's how powerful he is compared to the last Sub, Pantaro, who got smashed pretty easily.

Other than that, great as usual.
 
Negas are fairly rare, and SoS isn't that powerful.

If Scarecrow's Omega Banishment had landed, he would've killed him- which is why Stumpers intervened.

Pantaro wasn't a ranked user at all. SoS, Xzelion and Stumpers were, which is why they're much stronger. Pantaro gets stronger as things go on, though.
 
Don't Fear said:
Pantaro wasn't a ranked user at all. SoS, Xzelion and Stumpers were, which is why they're much stronger. Pantaro gets stronger as things go on, though.
Ah, that makes sense.

Also, the fact that Son of Suns was a Bureaucrat and practically one of the founders of the Wiki would logically make him pretty powerful.

By extension, this means Sub-Plumber is going to be pretty powerful too. Hoo boy.
Don't Fear said:
Negas are fairly rare,
Yes, but you'd expect the strongest and one of the oldest wikis in the whole Internet to at least be able to defend against a Nega. It's not like it would be anything new.

I mean, even Mariowiki had seen a Nega before in Willy on Wheels (who, incidentally, I noted in real life popped up on Wikipedia as Willy on Waffles. bizarre).
 
Actually in TT, Willy was a Nega for Wikipedia. He was killed by Michael and Dean- this is mentioned offhandedly, but it's actually pretty important.