my first comic

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yoshster

Whomp
This is my first comic, i plan on making more in the series if u guys give it thumbs up


to view it proparly u may need to download it and set the viewing range/zoom to 100%, but after that u will see it fine
 

ChaosNinji

Shine Sprite
yoshster said:
Pretty bad.

You practically stole Peachypie 3.14's sprites. >_>

And the outlines are REALLY bad...

And the plot makes no sense...

No speech bubbles...

So pretty good for a first comic. XD

Just kidding.
Not very good.
 

crystalking

King Bowser
ChaosNinji said:
yoshster said:
Pretty bad.

You practically stole Peachypie 3.14's sprites. >_>

And the outlines are REALLY bad...

And the plot makes no sense...

No speech bubbles...

So pretty good for a first comic. XD

Just kidding.
Not very good.
I agree with CN

no offense
 

yoshster

Whomp
I wanted to make the "thing" that fell and the"master" a mystery so the plot may not make total sense and well i'll just add speech bubbles nxt time but if
u guys think it stunk so bad then i guess there won't b a nxt time :(
 

ChaosNinji

Shine Sprite
yoshster said:
I wanted to make the "thing" that fell and the"master" a mystery so the plot may not make total sense and well i'll just add speech bubbles nxt time but if
u guys think it stunk so bad then i guess there won't b a nxt time :(
It can be mysterious and still make sense.

Take the Shadow Chronicles for an example.
 

Guiliant

Shine Sprite
Sucks.
 

Storm Yoshi

Cyclone Microsoft, it'll make your windows crash
ChaosNinji said:
yoshster said:
I wanted to make the "thing" that fell and the"master" a mystery so the plot may not make total sense and well i'll just add speech bubbles nxt time but if
u guys think it stunk so bad then i guess there won't b a nxt time :(
It can be mysterious and still make sense.

Take the Shadow Chronicles for an example.
That is true CN.
 

ChaosNinji

Shine Sprite
Pretty bad still.

And the outlines are REALLY bad...

And the plot makes more sense, but still isn't very understandable...

Bad grammer, too.

Keep trying.
 

3Dejong

THIS PERSONAL TEXT IS SILLY!
#1: Grammar.

#2: To upload, use Picoodle. It automatically uploads them bigger.

#3: BLANK SPACE SUCKS

#4: Add backgrounds to the text, to make it readable.

#5: WORK, WORK, WORK
 

Storm Yoshi

Cyclone Microsoft, it'll make your windows crash
#1 Get better sprites

#2 Spelling and Grammar

#3 Get a better story line I have got no idea whatsoever of whats going on

#4 If its about the wiki then maybe use official wiki backgrounds

#5 Take your time don't rush

#6 Like with #1 get some sprites (good ones) that aren't copied off other peoples!
 

3Dejong

THIS PERSONAL TEXT IS SILLY!
MUCH better.

I actually like it! :mrgreen:

Be very careful about grammar. It can make or break a comic. In your case, break it. :wink:
 

yoshster

Whomp
Thanx alot
i just got to wait on some permissions to use certain sprites an I can make the second edition, I of to userpedia to make a page for the comic
 

Storm Yoshi

Cyclone Microsoft, it'll make your windows crash
You've got my permission...remember my real username is Storm Yoshi
 

yoshster

Whomp
Ok cool, i'll add u in the 3rd issue :D
 
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