MUSA (Mario User Sports Association) Book 1: Miracle in Mushroom Kingdom

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http://userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/Miracle_in_Mushroom_Kingdom/Chapter_7



CHAPTER 7 IS UP!!!!!!


Yoshiwaker, just edit it on userpedia
 
Cinnamon Bun said:
OJ said:
Can I join as a New Main Character? Name is OJ
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I don't know. I already have a lot of main characters. If you want to be a main bully great, but if you really want to be on the "good" side, then I guess you can be a main character.
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I posted this earlier
 
Chapter 8 is up

http://userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/Miracle_in_Mushroom_Kingdom/Chapter_8


Toad85, edit in userpedia please
 
Review:

I really love the format of having the score have its own separate line when someone scored, but for some reason, you stop doing that towards the end, I think it is good. The beginning part went by a bit too fast and was a bit random. The last part was a bit confusing, maybe word order, punctuation, I don't know, but I manage to plow through that to see the point, not bad.

8/10
 
Vlad Plasmius said:
Editing and proofreading now.

I gave myself a slightly bigger role while I was at it.

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Ok that's fine. Just don't add too much that your a main main character. Also if your going to add you at the end for top scorers, you should change the number from 3 to 4 but it's ok cause I'll do it.

Thanks for the feedback everyone
 
Review:

OMG I played horrible I'm so ashamed

But for the review, I really liked this one. I think it maybe the best one so far for me. It reminds me of playing basketball on a team. You included a lot of "real-life things", in other words that story would probably happen in real life. Great chapter bro :)

10/10
 
Supremo said:
Review:

OMG I played horrible I'm so ashamed

But for the review, I really liked this one. I think it maybe the best one so far for me. It reminds me of playing basketball on a team. You included a lot of "real-life things", in other words that story would probably happen in real life. Great chapter bro :)

10/10
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Thanks so much bro! :D

That quote from here Coach Klops said was here. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OrOo6onsGdc

I'll probably use more of them :)
 
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